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Writing a TV Pilot based on my flash series!

Posted by Aeonstars - January 13th, 2008


Hey everyone. I'm writing a 22 minute version of episode 1. Well the first draft is finished and some pretty big changes are necessary. I'm not sure how I feel about it. Some stuff definitely works whereas other things, I don't know, don't seem to satisfy. Maybe I'm crazy anyway...it's based on Capture The Flag. My newgrounds series. Go check it out if you haven't! I made some pretty big changes to make it fit a 20 minute block though. Currently, the script is 19 pages long but I feel that's definitely as lengthy as I should make it. So anyway, I'll give you guys a taste of what it's about and I'd love any feedback (of course I'm gonna get a little flamed) on the content.

- Evan comes to camp TF, meets a weird kid named Mark.
- We find out a where Evan was three months ago. A completely different setting.
- Evan is having a hard time finding a buddy and Mark suggests asking a big kid.
- The big kids basically crucify Evan.
- We find out what Evan was involved in three months ago. A serious game of Capture The Flag.
- A mysterious man scares the kids who crucified Evan away.
- Evan's friends from the past abandon him. He's expelled from school.
- Evan meets Amy.
- Three other boys spy on Evan.

end of episode 1. Now I hope you didn't read that if you were unfamiliar with the series. So what do you guys think? Does this sound like something little kids would be interested in?


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maybe little kids, sure!

nice! that's the age range I'm going for.

Good luck. 20 minutes is gonna be some hard work haha.You considering pitching it to a network?

I've spoken to a woman from YTV. She told me she'd read it. YTV is a kids network here in canada.

sounds pretty cool. as lenkobiscuit said, try to pitch the cartoon idea to fox or smthn, a highly intensive paintball series. It would certainly get kids to go out and play capture the flag rather than stay at home and play with their stupid digi/poke/yugioh cards.

Sounds pretty cool. Do you think you can make/write anough episodes for this if a network such as YTV does pick it up for a season or more?

You said your 9 minute episode took 4 months. I suppose if it was picked up you'd have a team to work on it with you.

Good luck. I would love to see something that started on Newgrounds become a series. We've already seen Alien Hominid become a succesful game. So it's very possible

I know I can. And if, in a dream world, I got people working on this, I don't think the creative well would dry up. It might freeze in place though so I better put a lid on it.

holy hell!
you Canadians are crazy
you going to place it on NG whens it's done?
I wanna see a picture of granfather!
Is the mysterious man a former SAS soldier? :P

Cool, just keep the amazing writing and you'll be fine. I'd probably infiltrate their headquarters just to get to see the movie. Since you're putting the series on newgrounds without the oversight of the corporate overlords, just slower, I'm fine if you don't put the pilot, or any of the (hopefully) future episodes on newgrounds.

thank you so much for saying the writing is amazing. The thing I'm worried about though is if it will be good compared to other children's shows or if it's on the level of children's shows.

I think it's a really good idea!!!!! Have you seen the crap they have on ytv?! If they have half a brain they would definitly accept this!!

Are we still voicing it? Cause that'd be cool :) haha Good luck on this, definitely go for it, dude. Even if they don't take it, you'll never know until you try. Break a leg! This sounds like an opportunity of a lifetime! How did you manage to get the YTV lady to say she'd take a look? I mean, did she just take your word for it or what?

I spoke to her on the phone and she says they review new scripts every 2 weeks or so. I asked her if she would read it and she said yes so...I guess she will lol. In a dream world, if they accepted it and let me have some kind of say in the production of it, I'd get you guys to get an audition for sure :). Especially the VAs who want to voice act professionally.

Is it a former SAS soldier?

what is an SAS soldier?

If you love your awesome voice actors (Did I mention that they're awesome?) you will tell Ms. YTV face to send over the VA's. ^____^

Perhaps I could bring you guys in a suitcase? What do ya say? :P.

That's hot man. Will you be animating it if it passes?

I don't think I have any power over that.

I have some mixed feelings about this , Either way I'm sure that this will only do good things for you.

Well good luck.

And don't forget us here at Newgrounds ;_;

what's weird is I was thinking of this
exact thing when I watched it a week ago

does it mean there won't be a episode 3?

There will definitely be an ep 3 here on NG and an ep 4

what age range?

I mean like
3-7
7-10
10-12

Well I'm writing the material so it is appropriate for all audiences but the anime watching kids mostly.

So which network asked you to do this?

I called them and asked them. I know. Im thinking big.

so like a naruto watching audience?

basically. meaning I have to apply the same conventions but my type of humor is very different from anime shows. I know for a fact that kids like it though.

so will that mean the drawing style will
change to fit an anime themed audience?

Things like suddenly getting giant heads when they are angry
etc

That's not the tone of the story. More like lost for kids.

SAS is the Special Air Service
Top class soldiers that do mostly behind enemy line missions
Special forces they are also known as.
The SAS originated from UK but then was used in Australia and New Zealand
One thing that is annoying about SAS soldiers is when they have their picture on tellie on in the newspaper their faces have to be blured for security reasons unless they retired.
here are some links
<a href="http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Special_Air_Service">http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Special_
Air_Service</a>
<a href="http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Australian_Special_Air_Service_Regiment">http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Australi an_Special_Air_Service_Regiment</a>
<a href="http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Special_Air_Service_of_New_Zealand">http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Special_
Air_Service_of_New_Zealand</a>
I wouldn't want to be fighting against them that's for sure

So we wont be collaborating?
Cause iw as really hoping we could work together.

nono, dont get me wrong! CTF will be continuing here on NG :)

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